Undertow

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by Goblin (I have proven to myself and the world that I need mental help) on Thursday, 07-Jul-2005 12:19:04

Come to me when the lights fade..come wrap your arms around me like music,like love, we can pretend for a while as the band plays out and the waves pull away, were you ever mine, it's hard to tell.You came in summer and led me astray so we will fool ourselves again in autumn's slow dance

Post 2 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Thursday, 07-Jul-2005 12:24:06

Wow... the imagery...

Post 3 by Goblin (I have proven to myself and the world that I need mental help) on Thursday, 07-Jul-2005 12:38:33

Thank you I wasn't very pleased with it...do you think it rambles

Post 4 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Thursday, 07-Jul-2005 12:46:23

Mmm, I don't know. Since it isn't formatted, I can't see where the line breaks are supposed to be. However, I have a slight idea, and it seems fine to me.

Post 5 by Goblin (I have proven to myself and the world that I need mental help) on Thursday, 07-Jul-2005 12:52:55

Your right .. I tend to just write the poem as it comes so at the time everything seems to make sense...smile